[Your background, experiences, and values will enhance the diversity of Kellogg's student body. How? ]

During my senior year in college, my father was diagnosed with terminal skin cancer. Like most cancer patients, he spent the majority of his time in the hospital; he often spoke of how nice the staff was, and how much his stay was enriched by the services offered by the volunteers. I felt a great debt to those people who helped my father and mother during that difficult time, and I wanted to do the same for other people in similar situations.

When I moved to New York after graduation, I decided to volunteer at the Sloan-Kettering Memorial Hospital until I found a job. Over the next few months, I worked thirty hours a week helping patients and their families. One of the most rewarding experiences at the hospital was organizing patient voting for the 1992 Presidential election. I was responsible for coordinating the procurement and distribution of absentee ballots with nurses, patients, hospital staff, and the various voting administrations within the five boroughs of New York City.

The response was overwhelming. The patients were overjoyed to be included in the voting process. I knew from my father that the most demoralizing circumstance of a prolonged hospital stay was the feeling that the world was passing you by. On that November day, however, I was able to help those patients feel like part of society again. I will always be grateful for that.

Once I found a job, I had to curtail my hours at the hospital, but I did not stop my volunteer work. And although my job prohibits me from volunteering as much as I'd like, I still try to find the time. My volunteer work has allowed me to help others cope with the terrible pain of illness, which I have experienced first-hand and through my family. The satisfaction that I gain when I help patients and their families is unlike any other feeling I have ever had in my life.

I've found that my work also helps me to deal with and accept the loss of my own father. If it were not for him, I never would have started volunteering. The good work I do is a constant tribute to his memory.
As an individual, I have learned the benefits of altruism, and I firmly believe that companies should also take an active role in philanthropy. I was pleased to see in the admissions brochure that other Kellogg students feel the same, as demonstrated by their Business with a Heart program. I know that my unique perspective and experiences would contribute to this group, and enable me to enrich the lives of the community as well as those of my fellow students.

點(diǎn)評(píng)：

大綱：整篇文章以身患晚期癌癥的父親住院其間，對(duì)志愿者的服務(wù)感到很窩心為線索，引出作者并沒(méi)有因?yàn)楦赣H的病而一蹶不振或怨天尤人，而是從中受到啟發(fā)也到醫(yī)院申請(qǐng)成為了一名志愿者來(lái)幫助更多的人。在其做志愿者過(guò)程中，作者認(rèn)為最有意義的事情就是組織醫(yī)院的病人為1992年總統(tǒng)大選投票的那段經(jīng)歷。病人們?cè)谶@其間顯得極為興奮高興，因?yàn)樗麄冇X(jué)得自己終于被承認(rèn)了作為社會(huì)中的一分子履行了自己應(yīng)有的義務(wù)，而不是被拋棄在醫(yī)院里整日無(wú)人理會(huì)的廢物。

主題：作者通過(guò)自己的成長(zhǎng)經(jīng)歷來(lái)強(qiáng)調(diào)突出了自己的興趣有來(lái)，以自己的切身感受。體會(huì)到了這份工作的對(duì)于社會(huì)的重要性以及自己在當(dāng)中所取得的成就感和意義。

取材：整篇文章以作者的獨(dú)特經(jīng)歷為題材， 通過(guò)自身的經(jīng)歷來(lái)渲染正篇的文章。字里行間中都感人至深。作者在做志愿者的過(guò)程中，幫助了需要幫助的人，他自己也從中學(xué)到了利他主義如何關(guān)心別人

借鑒：作為世界著名西北大學(xué)的凱洛格商學(xué)院， 其院校內(nèi)一定不乏成績(jī)優(yōu)秀，能力很強(qiáng)的學(xué)生或申請(qǐng)者，但是一定也需要作者這樣富有愛(ài)心的人才，作為一所成功的院?；蚴枪荆粦?yīng)該只看到自己每天獲了多少利，也應(yīng)該做一些慈善事業(yè)來(lái)幫助需要幫助的人。特別提到作者作為一名申請(qǐng)者注意到了此商學(xué)院有個(gè)“愛(ài)心工程”的項(xiàng)目，所以此篇文章無(wú)疑與商學(xué)院這個(gè)項(xiàng)目不謀而合，必會(huì)受到招生辦的親睞！所以此篇文章是一篇很成功的申請(qǐng)文章。

譯文：

命題要求：你的背景，經(jīng)歷，價(jià)值將會(huì)提高Kellogg學(xué)生的多樣性。如何做到？

當(dāng)我在大學(xué)的最后一年里，我的父親不幸被診斷出了末期皮膚癌。像大多數(shù)癌癥患者一樣，他余下的大部分時(shí)間是在醫(yī)院度過(guò)的。他常常會(huì)和我講起醫(yī)院的員工對(duì)他有多么好，并且感覺(jué)到余下的生命由志愿者帶來(lái)的這些細(xì)微服務(wù)變得更有意義了。在那段艱難的時(shí)間段，我對(duì)給過(guò)我父母幫助的這些人有一種深深的罪惡感，同時(shí)我想為其他有相似狀況的人去給予同樣的幫助。

當(dāng)我畢業(yè)后搬到了紐約，我決定在我找到一份工作前先在Sloan-Kettering Memoria醫(yī)院做志愿者。之后的幾個(gè)月，我每周在醫(yī)院工作30小時(shí)去幫助病人和他們的家屬。其中最有意義的事情就是組織醫(yī)院的病人為1992年總統(tǒng)大選投票的那段經(jīng)歷。我負(fù)責(zé)紐約市的五個(gè)區(qū)內(nèi)選票的整理和缺席票數(shù)的分類(lèi)。包括護(hù)士，病人，醫(yī)院的職員和各種投票管理部門(mén)。

病人們?cè)谶@其間顯得極為興奮高興， 因?yàn)樗麄円材軈⑴c到投票選舉的進(jìn)程中了。我知道在在醫(yī)院里拖延生命讓他感覺(jué)世界。在那年的11月，我感覺(jué)到了我有能力去幫助那些病人讓他們?cè)俅胃惺艿绞巧鐣?huì)的一分子。