在美國留學(xué)申請中，個人陳述寫作非常重要，它能彌補你的硬件傷，為自己的申請加分，因此常常能決定申請的成敗。尤其是在美國留學(xué)申請日趨激烈的今天，個人陳述的寫作更顯的重要。
    一、重復(fù)簡歷型
    I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university, which provided me with a profound background in atmospheric science. During this period, I received Outstanding Student Scholarship for my excellent performance in the academic field. I found that …is abstruse and interested, and there are so many things I did not understand. Thus I decided to learn more.
    點評：個人陳述不要去重復(fù)簡歷中的東西，這在很多學(xué)校的PS要求中明確提到，個人陳述的寫作要具體到事件上，事件解決上，而不要單純重復(fù)已有的內(nèi)容。
    二、學(xué)校介紹型
    I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China. （…… University is a prestigious university of general education with 20 departments and a regular annual enrollment of 8,000 students ） I studied at ……（E. E） Department, ahighly selective department with a gathering of smart students who are hard to compete with.
    點評：該同學(xué)的開頭等于是一個申請學(xué)校的簡介，這好像是在幫助學(xué)校做宣傳，或表達(dá)你有多了解該學(xué)校，而不是寫個人陳述了。這是沒有意義的開頭，白白浪費了字?jǐn)?shù)，最容易被秒據(jù)掉。
    三、抄襲句式型
    As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since Ientered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.
    點評：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 這種句式不知道是從哪里學(xué)到的，很多同學(xué)在用。但你要知道，老外最恨抄襲，最喜原創(chuàng)，所以利害關(guān)系大家想想吧。
    四、救世主型
    I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, … He must ever be receptive and sensitive to the new; and have sufficient courage and skill to novel facts and to deal with them." And I have been longing to be the man to face and solve novel problems.
    點評：一副救世主的形象，小時候就受富蘭克林的影響，立志改變世界。個人陳述的寫作一定要個人化具體化，別吹大牛，甚至帶著一種霸權(quán)主義思維。
    五、猶抱琵琶型
    Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.
    點評：重點放在自己要做重大決定上了，人生的轉(zhuǎn)折點，然后來上句所謂名言警句。浪費字?jǐn)?shù)，有限的字?jǐn)?shù)里，同學(xué)們應(yīng)該學(xué)會直接，并且抓住重點，突出自己最有優(yōu)勢的方面，最有特色的方面。
    六、言幼稚型
    'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't­' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky­' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle. So most of the things in my family has been takenapart by me, from my father's shaver to my mom' motorcycle. I can even fix somesimple households, listened to other people's praise, to learn science well became my dream and felt the science will accompany with me in my whole life.
    點評：上來就回憶童年少年自己如何有著遠(yuǎn)大抱負(fù)，who cares.。個人陳述字?jǐn)?shù)有限，卻用這么多話描述童年，沒有任何意義。學(xué)校想知道你如何看待未來，而不是如何度過過去。